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If There Was No Pain by ~deathsun:icondeathsun:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




If I cared enough to say goodbye,
You would still be crying through the night.
And the tears you shed would drown the world.

If I knew enough to let you go,
You might not be one to leave alone,
And I don't have the time to collect the blades.

If I wept out loud so you could hear,
You might not understand how I feel,
And I'm not sure you could even understand.

If I told you directly, to your face,
You would stare blankly into my soul,
And promise me that everything would change.

If only there was no pain.
©2002-2009 ~deathsun
:icondeathsun:

Author's Comments

I would like to start off to say that this poem is not representing anything in my personal life...ok?! I've just been in the poetry mood lately, and this came into my head. I think there are those out there that can understand the meaning.

The roses I found in DA's wonderful stock photo collection.

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:iconsilentdark:
~silentdark Aug 26, 2002, 11:32:38 PM
May not represent how you're feeling, but sums it all up for others...
:) (Smile) Like it though..
:iconadolescentrage:
~adolescentrage Aug 27, 2002, 5:46:38 AM
that was a good poem. i can really relate to it. very nice poetry as always :) (Smile) keep it up.

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..:: + I myself am hell + ::..
:icontherium:
~therium Aug 27, 2002, 5:17:53 PM
*Steps up boldly* I will comment on your poem death!! *Super hero pose* Haha, anywho, not a bad poem, I like ones that rhym and such, but this still expresses some pretty good emotion. Good work.

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:pointandlaugh: :confused:
:iconnemish:
`nemish Aug 27, 2002, 9:02:35 PM
Subtle. Powerful. A favourite. +fav

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...end of line
:iconfox718:
~fox718 Aug 29, 2002, 5:23:32 PM
Nice poem, very direct i think. just like the first comment, may not be you but it just may be alot of us. i really like this

--
You know, I wish I had something interesting to say.
But I don't.
:icondarkpsiozzy:
~darkpsiozzy Aug 30, 2002, 2:29:16 PM
If there was no pain we wouldn't enjoy the good things in life. good poem, very deep.

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"One of the penalties for refusing to participate in politics is that you end up being governed by your inferiors."
-Plato
:iconjustb:
~justb Mar 26, 2005, 5:31:20 PM
that's a powerful last stanza. the last line is weak and does not do anything to make the last stanza felt.

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"I've taken enough walks alone
to know how real nothing is."
~dystopian-dream-girl
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